Selasa, 16 Februari 2010

Discriptin Money

Description Things

About descrition Money


Hi, friends this,s my love thing. My love things is money I think it,s no only myself but you love too because something you wanted you using money for buying it . And then all of people. It,s no only us but everyone in the world love money why I said everyone loved money because whenever all of people or we life, we were used money. I love money because it,s help me and I may study here. If without money actually I didn,t came in Jogyakarta.




Then, money is one of equipt why because whenever we study or worked in office are only abaut for money. So money is very imporntantce equipt, for example, if we wanted paying shcool money is we used money and also if we buy something used money or like we going by plain and paying ticket is used money.

Money is all of people said that, time is money so I think money is all of people love it.



6 komentar:

  1. eli.. please recheck your writing..
    u made a lot of mistakes..
    don't write it,s anymore. it's not correct form. i know you can improve your ability,,
    _Linda_

    BalasHapus
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    BalasHapus
  3. eli.. I agree with Linda's comment.
    you have to check the words, I mean the spelling of each word.
    You have to make your sentences clearer so that the readers will not be confused.

    BalasHapus
  4. eli. . .
    you should check your tense that you use. . .

    ". . .we were used money. . ." ===> passive voice
    it should be ". .we use money. ."

    i think you can add some informations about what does it look like? ? ?

    also check your speeling! ! !
    "About descrition Money"
    is it descrition or description? ? ?


    keep writing:D

    BalasHapus
  5. Eli...the word, "It,s" must change "It's" or "It is" hehehe....

    BalasHapus
  6. elli you must check your paragraphs again,..
    your spelling, grammar..ok?
    don't ever give up bro :)

    BalasHapus