Oneday, when i was Junior High School my teacher said that,we have invinite cause every students wanted to follow join raning competition abaut ten kilometers. After my teachers given information, I thougt that,I must try to join competition.Then,join the independence competition 17 August. Early in the morning all of people gathred in one place and than started to ran.When all of people start I was ran very quickly and the other people were bihided me,but in the middle of the road I was tired cause we started runing at 2 o,oclok in the afternoon so,it was very hot and I was thirty.However I thougth that,I had finished til the line stop.
Finally I finished it but I didn,t win so,they counted only five winner.I was finished on 3rd but they first and the second were conssted of until five so, they won and they got champion cup then got money.And than the first winner was got much money. He gotten ten million ,that time I was dissapinted but I thought that it was one of my experience. Abaut join ranning competition when I was junior high school. When I finished in stop line there were many policeman and people. While,i was finished in stop line, my was tired and didn,t power so,I was laidown.Then, I waked up and took a water and drink awardafter I was take a bath because there were provided water for bath and drink then my was normal and went to dormatory.When I went to dormatory and I told to my friends that" I almost win competition but the others people win".But my friend Jhon said to me that "friend don,t you worry because it,s one of your experience, so you must try again I belive you. You may win next year" And was suggest to me. So I was pleasent
Finally I finished it but I didn,t win so,they counted only five winner.I was finished on 3rd but they first and the second were conssted of until five so, they won and they got champion cup then got money.And than the first winner was got much money. He gotten ten million ,that time I was dissapinted but I thought that it was one of my experience. Abaut join ranning competition when I was junior high school. When I finished in stop line there were many policeman and people. While,i was finished in stop line, my was tired and didn,t power so,I was laidown.Then, I waked up and took a water and drink awardafter I was take a bath because there were provided water for bath and drink then my was normal and went to dormatory.When I went to dormatory and I told to my friends that" I almost win competition but the others people win".But my friend Jhon said to me that "friend don,t you worry because it,s one of your experience, so you must try again I belive you. You may win next year" And was suggest to me. So I was pleasent
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BalasHapusokay elli, please pay attention on the first sentence. i think after that you shouldn't have a comma. then what's the meaning of invinite? do u mean that raning is berlari? it must be running bro.
BalasHapushmm, okay i think you made so much mistakes on your spelling. don't worry. just keep on writing.